Chapter 124 - now i really like few things so far : Not too many daughters of destiny,neither does he have to get them all as if collecting them which is one of my pet peeves with most villain stories , he's not killing all the son of destiny either and are just using them as investment unlike all the rest villain stories mostly that kills male mcs and capture all Godddesses bleh. Now comes the issues although I get it , it's q cultivation novel and there's gonna be lot of stuff that they keep putting pretty much over stretching it but I personally think that bringing too much stuff about future or worrying about what kind of secrets might be there and hinting at them constantly ruins the fun .. second issue-prettty much linked to first the life script system that he got now is just too op and doesn't make sense as it pretty much spoils the whole ending saying crap about him and his subordinates already reaching mydraid world levels blah blah like we know as mv he's gonna succeed but putting them like this just ruins the novel completely for me if anything script function should be about only the near future to see if you'd get in trouble or get any opportunities so he can invest better

This story starts with a compelling system-based concept, but quickly loses momentum due to how poorly the system is handled. What should be a consistent, logical enhancement system becomes increasingly vague and frustrating. The protagonist kills a spirit beast and gets no points—because it's not a thousand years old? That kind of arbitrary rule isn’t just immersion-breaking, it’s clearly a tool to slow the MC's growth rather than part of a well-designed system. This is a common pitfall in "point-based" enhancement stories. Early progression feels fine, but as the story continues, the point requirements skyrocket, making even basic upgrades a slog. It often results in the MC resorting to mindless grinding or indiscriminate killing just to progress, which drags the narrative and undermines character development. If a system is going to be a core part of the story, it needs clear, consistent rules from the start. Otherwise, it just feels like the author is moving the goalposts to control pacing—either stalling growth or suddenly boosting power out of nowhere. In this case, the system feels more like a narrative restraint than a tool for growth, and that seriously weakens what could have been a great story. And okay now I'm officially done with it ,in last chapter when he came to academy mc was marveling about empires heritage cuz somehow there was a cultivation novel type staircase that had more heaven qi the higher you went lol like seriously in whole mainland the only one that has it is sea god island and it has god behind it it's not something a mere heaven dou empire can have the fact that author pushes it here shows how clueless he is pulling stuff out of his ass for no reason

One of the most jarring aspects of this story is the baffling decision to name two characters *Naruto Uzumaki* and *Naruto Namikaze*, seemingly expecting readers to overlook the confusion that naturally follows. The idea of two individuals—let alone supposed brothers—sharing the same first name is not only unrealistic, but also creates unnecessary narrative chaos. It immediately undermines the immersion and logic of the story. Equally questionable is the use of "Namikaze" as a surname for one Naruto while the other retains "Uzumaki." Given the canon context where Naruto proudly carries the Uzumaki name—both as a symbol of identity and resilience—this switch feels superficial and ill-considered. The author appears to treat "Uzumaki" as a first name rather than a surname, which further suggests a lack of understanding or attention to the source material. Moreover, if one Naruto carries the Namikaze name—directly linking him to the Fourth Hokage—it’s difficult to believe the villagers would still treat him with the same disdain. This completely disregards the established social dynamics of the Naruto universe, weakening the believability of the story’s world-building. Overall, this naming choice reflects a deeper issue with how the characters and their relationships are conceptualized. It’s hard to invest in a story when its foundational elements feel so detached from logic and canon consistency. A more thoughtful approach to character identity and narrative coherence would go a long way in improving the overall quality.

Would give even less than 1 star if I could

It's a stupid story author must be high when he wrote this like i really don't get it why author seems to forget what kind of world douluo dalu is and starts acting as if it's a cultivation world where a lot of heavenly phenomenon happens that seemingly everyone can feel lol like there's no way anybody on the whole continent can just detect it simply cuz he awakened his martial spirit if someone should detect it. ..it should be only possible on a special place like sea god island

The recent chapters of this fanfic have been a major letdown. First, the unnecessary romance subplot feels completely out of place—especially with the author forcing in a crossover love interest from another anime. As a sports anime fan, I'm here for the game, not the transmigrator's love life. Second, the protagonist's behavior makes no sense. He clearly remembers details from their first year, so forgetting that Miyuki was the main catcher during Chris’s third year—something crucial tied to Chris’s injury and Sawamura’s growth—is just lazy writing. It feels like the author suddenly remembered they needed character development and pulled this plot point out of nowhere, not to mention he didn't even report it after 5 chapters of dilly daddling. Also it might seam a very cold answer but I'm sorry it's not about what Chris wants, in a team hiding one's injury isn't something he alone can decide you can call it dreams ,his resolve or whatever bs but imo it's irresponsible and stubbornness if he were to suddenly reach a point where he couldn't do anything mid game then whole team will be left in tatters and yet he despite knowing becomes an accomplice not to mention it's not even Chris last year . Wtf is this dumb writing no body is saying they can't play without him as long as he rests for normal teams Miyuki can easily handle it they're making it out to be more difficult than it should be, informing coach is a must even if it's chris who keeps on insisting to play that's his choice but team should know and prepare for a situation and him not telling is clearly not helping anyone Lastly, the constant confusion between catchers and pitchers is just sloppy and irritating. All in all, these issues have really ruined the story for me

How do I say it...like i really love the concept of him being son of destiny yet getting villain system ,also like the fact that he just doesn't become a freaking evil cultivator for system sake and does things on his own whether it's plundering luck and all he keeps it moderate as i like but there are two issue that are really making me wanna drop it one being pace which is problem with all cultivation novels cuz they keeps on dragging stuff with so many freaking cultivation stages that it becomes so mundane at some point..here is same issue so far it's already over 300 chapter and he's still no where near the rank he needs to ascend this lower world so which means we'd keep getting having to read this same bs... second look I get that author wanna make it harem and fun it's all good although I'm not one to enjoy too many female protagonist but it's still fine in cultivation setting considering half of the time they get seperated when they ascend and new harem starts lol but here it's starting to get annoyed when story progression gets hindered so much cuz of this bs like it was fine with his wife ,his fox sister ,his new fiance , but then that spy girl he literally took her down so easily same with this current princess now it has become almost like a collection habit lol and when there's stuff like this I'd rather you finish then quickly and get it over with instead of spending 50-100 chapters per girl that's just annoying quickly get the main shit done man Not to mention i can already see 5 more harem members already on the way like come on man no one stipulated that son of luck all have to be his women ,it can be normal friends and acquaintances too and enemies too who he uses as leeks so currently he's not able to stick to main point of novel and rather had turned into a dumbass romance bs where system basically rewards him for winning over a goddess which is far cry from what it should be

It's really kinda annoying like if you're gonna have a system why not write it like turning him into a super enhanced version of kevin + Gwen where with kevins power he can become any alien like ben and you can fullfill your dream too rather than stealing Ben's watch and by having gwens powers he can do magic too it'd be much more cool and op having him there like that instead of just turning ben into a useless mc completely

Trash concept for lazy mc like wtf i don't mind skills working on their own as he won't have to work hard that's all we want but what's with bs of his body walking around and cooking on it's own like in this way is his life even his own if his body is just doing everything on it's own ... I'd much rather prefer he getting better at cooking and stuff and at least living his life oh it's own currently it looks like he's a prisoner in his own body that does everything on autopilot while he can just watch anime in prison and somehow author thinks it's a cool idea bleh And this lottery bs is even worse as if it's not enough having a system that's so op mf doesn't cultivate himself, it does chores by itself, fights itself like what's even fun at this point he has taken passanger seat in his own body and I don't mind lottery but issue is it's getting all sorts of op crap from other worlds I'd rather he's given stuff from douluo itself like another martial spirit ,external soul bone or a magic herb etc Also despite all it's flaws i didn't mind reading it as light fun but issue is authors just starts blabbering like fools for no reason...first silver dragon at this point is greatly injured and can't come out at every freaking new thing that happens he barely gained her consciousness during the fight between di tian and yuhuo ..second even if she's conscious she's never gonna come out why? Cuz unlike part 3 where God realm was gone currently it's there and the whole mainland has god inheritance places all over she won't risk being captured by God kings for no reason she hasn't yet fallen in love by spitting in two and become a dead love brain for her current self she'd never do something endangering beast race fffs ...I get it she's beautiful but stop with the bs of her walking around the mainland in first part and destroying the whole logic to get in her pants

It's a trash every single annoying troupe is there that you can think of