Too long explanation (narrations) , repetitive information, too short conversation "...........". The author FAILED to make the actions & emotion of story more realistic. The whole story is flat. The author should put more information in the conversation "........" instead of trying to explain everything through narrations. Too much narrations would make the story flat. The author should learn from other author of how to make the story more appealing, attractive, easy to be understood with fast pace reader. When there is conversation between people, let them finish their conversation. Don't cut them off with too much narrations. Conversation between people is more attractive than too much narrations