Reincarnated as the Primarch of the lost Eleventh Legion, the protagonist finds himself facing an erased destiny.
Chosen by the source realm known as the Kingdom of Disorder, Ning Lu’s fate is rewritten from the very moment he awakens in the gene-lab gestation pod. With the power of mysticism and alchemy, he delivers a startling blow to the four Chaos Gods.
During the Great Crusade, he expands the frontiers of the Imperium. In the Horus Heresy, he personally executes traitor Primarchs.
After the Emperor is bound to the Golden Throne, he becomes the last active Primarch—constantly rushing between war zones to extinguish fires across the galaxy.
In the War of the Beast, he slays the Beast itself.
During the Long War, he strikes terror into the hearts of traitors and heretics.
All praise his unwavering loyalty. But… is that the whole truth?
“I'm just taking advantage of the situation. What? You didn’t notice?
With the right alchemical ingredients, I can cultivate Beyonders.
Belisarius Cawl? He’s just my ‘mentor’…”
“I am the shadow of Order, exploiting every loophole hidden within the rules.”
He is The Black Emperor—a being who rewrites the laws of reality, forges a new Imperium, and opens a future of hope amid the darkness for all of humanity.
[Keywords: Warhammer + Primarch OC + Original Legion + Lord of the Mysteries + Potion Pathways / Sequences]
I spent more than 2 hours making this fanfiction more or less readable. My God, the Chinese distorted everything: first names, last names, and also came up with different nicknames for characters and alien heroes.
Overall, it's not a bad fanfiction, although only 16 chapters have been read (2 hours of editing Chinese shit for you guys), but overall the fanfiction follows the plot of the original. The only difference is the participation of the presenter and his more powerful watch, Nemetrix.
I do not know what will happen next, but I hope that will not turn everything into a fucking xianxia with the Monkey King.
A genre where an MC travels to different worlds and solves problems there, and gets rewarded for it.
The novel is below average, too stupid, too naive, and a clickbait description. I decided to read a novel because it's mostly a movie dungeon, not a fucking anime. I've read more than 40 chapters, but the author only writes about Chinese films that nobody fucking needs, while in the description he mentioned classics of Western cinema.
The MC here is also incredibly dumb, he wants to act secretive, but then he goes through the dungeon with his roommates, and they are quickly found out, forcing them to reveal themselves. Dumb solutions to create conflicts and enemies, cliched characters, meaningless dialogues, uninteresting plot, illogical world, everything is bad.
A standard novel from the conveyor, nothing special, everything is standard. Although I laughed at the setting of the main character in the form of an orphan with a 100 million fortune!
Seriously, was the author drugged when he wrote about the biography of the main character? I guess that the author made such a stupid move so that the MC would not steal at the very beginning, while there is still order. But because of this, the whole storyline with workplace conflicts, love interest, and others doesn't make sense. MC did not receive this 100 million inheritance SUDDENLY from an uncle who died in the USA, it was left by his rich parents who lived in a villa!
At the same time, the author emphasizes that MC drives a Chinese car, goes to work, and behaves modestly! Complete nonsense, most likely, the author got a slap on the head from the editor or censorship and urgently changed the beginning and biography of the MC from criminal to what we have now, while not paying attention to the subsequent plot and the logic of the narrative.
Not bad for his genre, the main character is not an idiot or a moron, he behaves more or less adequately.
The plot is also befitting the genre: almost none, in terms of survival everything is standard, in terms of cheat it is interesting, in general it is not bad, you can read.
Among the disadvantages, I can single out anime logic with cat girls and censorship.
To be fair, it's worth noting that the fanfiction is not of high quality. The author could not harmoniously fit his main character into the plot. MC behaves like a hyperactive teenager, and in order not to seem like a complete idiot, the author made Klein the same idiot.
The idea of helping Klein was close to many readers from the very beginning, and it's good that MC is not trying to pretend to be someone else in front of Klein and admits that he is the same traverser.
But the performance leaves much to be desired, everything turns into a children's farce. And when the author makes a digression on the 30th chapter, he kills the last hope and motivation to read this fanfiction. At the same time, the author, in such a poor performance, considers himself a serious writer and his clumsy fanfiction a full—fledged novel divided into volumes.
Compared to other fanfiction, this one loses both in terms of atmosphere, is closer to ordinary Chinese novels, where logic is absent. And I suggest, because the author is used to writing dumb novels, that everyone in fanfiction behaves like dumb teenagers, with anime dialogues during a fight.
Well, what can I say? An ordinary novel in its "perverted" genre. Apocalypse, Super OP cheat, dumb and offended idiot as the main character, pseudo-revenge as an excuse for the vile deeds of mc.
Nothing outstanding, like all other novels of this genre, dumb, meaningless, no plot, no logic, only Violence, perversion, fetishes, humiliation of people written for sick Chinese people.
The first 15 chapters of the novel are written flawlessly. Perhaps the author has reworked an existing text or the editors have tried. However, then the pace of narration slowed down, and the plot began to develop too slowly. Inappropriate jokes based on coincidences have appeared.
This is a rather strange decision, or it was like that initially, and then the author started editing the text and improving the style. The first edited chapters are a decent novel. But then it becomes obvious that this is an above-average novel at best, in which the artificial stretching of the text and the illogical actions of the characters are noticeable.
On the one hand, it's good that this isn't another Chinese post-apocalypse with a harem and powerful cheat. On the other hand, the dynamics suffer greatly due to the stretching of the text and inappropriate humor.
I'm giving it 5 stars so far, but we'll see what happens next.
#edit#
Almost a hundred chapters have been read in the hope of improvement. But there is no improvement, the author started writing about a group of characters, you read 5-10 chapters, but only one day has passed in the plot. The plot seems to be frozen in time, it would seem that the end of the world has come, there are monsters outside, but there is no rush, which should be in such a situation. The characters don't try to do anything, but just live a normal life, taking their time. The author tries to captivate the reader by hinting at a change of scenery by sending the main character to another place. But right after that, he starts writing about how the men who survived are trying to fuck women, how someone cheated on someone, how someone stole something, and so on ad infinitum.
All these hundred chapters can be safely, without loss of context and meaning, fit into 30 chapters, but the author pulls and pulls! The desire to continue reading abruptly disappeared, with such a presentation and with so many chapters, the MC will move from a dead end in 120-150 chapters at best.
2 stars!
I can't say that this novel is terrible, but the author is clearly a schoolboy.
Logic died at the very beginning, when the author drew a concept where people, due to demographic and material problems, somehow found a way to teleport to another reality and after 6 months of being there, they can come into contact with Earth and send materials.
According to the novel's lore, every 3 years 30 million people aged 18-21 can go there. It's been a long time, people have started to adapt to such changes, even opened educational institutions that teach how to survive in another world. And the main character is an excellent student who graduated with 1st place in the exams! But he refused to sponsor and work for others, because he has a cheat.
And the author forgets all of the above right away, because the main character doesn't even know how to use a fishing net, what the hell did they teach you there?
These are basic things, humanity has contact with survivors who survived the first 6 months, and they know what's going on in another world. But absolutely all newbies don't even know the basic things for survival and make a fuss in the chat when the MC sold two fish.
I don't see any obvious racism yet, but to be honest, when there is an alternative, it's a bit boring to read on. I'll temporarily postpone it, I'll come back sometime later, let's see what the author wrote in 1000+ chapters.
To be honest, I'm disappointed, everything in the novel follows a template, but the main character is an idiot and a naive teenager.
The author, in turn, repeatedly tries to show him as an intelligent and cunning person, but it turns out to be a cringe. Because of this, the author simply lowered the intelligence of all the characters except the main character, which is simply unbearable to read.
The enemies who wanted to cheat the MC, but were caught, first ask for forgiveness, and at that moment the author sharply reduces their intelligence, and they, being held hostage by the main character, begin to make demands and so on. What was that? Is this really written by a human?
There is no logic in the novel, the system with a set of troops is written for show, the parameters and rules can change at any time to suit the plot.
Although there is no plot as such, the book is generally below average.
A genre created by brainwashed Chinese. The plot, the concept, the theme — all this does not matter, because the main thing is to emphasize how China suffers from attacks from all over the world, but does not give up. And when the main character appears, everything starts to get better!
This genre has no value, it's a waste of time. No matter how hard the authors try, mighty China remains unchanged, everyone is trying to rob and destroy it. Another fatal mistake and irritant is online chat! Almost half of the chapter, and sometimes more, is occupied by meaningless and stupid comments from the audience. I honestly don't understand, don't the Chinese really have any friends? Why do they prefer online chat rooms in a fucking novel, rather than regular communication with people?
The author also stole "Warhammer" and wove it into his novel. After all, China is powerful and strong, it has a 5,000-year history, didn't you find your own Sci-fi for this? Lol!
It's all complete nonsense.
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4.7 (16 reviews)Reincarnated as the Primarch of the lost Eleventh Legion, the protagonist finds himself facing an erased destiny.
Chosen by the source realm known as the Kingdom of Disorder, Ning Lu’s fate is rewritten from the very moment he awakens in the gene-lab gestation pod. With the power of mysticism and alchemy, he delivers a startling blow to the four Chaos Gods.
During the Great Crusade, he expands the frontiers of the Imperium. In the Horus Heresy, he personally executes traitor Primarchs.
After the Emperor is bound to the Golden Throne, he becomes the last active Primarch—constantly rushing between war zones to extinguish fires across the galaxy.
In the War of the Beast, he slays the Beast itself.
During the Long War, he strikes terror into the hearts of traitors and heretics.
All praise his unwavering loyalty. But… is that the whole truth?
“I'm just taking advantage of the situation. What? You didn’t notice?
With the right alchemical ingredients, I can cultivate Beyonders.
Belisarius Cawl? He’s just my ‘mentor’…”
“I am the shadow of Order, exploiting every loophole hidden within the rules.”
He is The Black Emperor—a being who rewrites the laws of reality, forges a new Imperium, and opens a future of hope amid the darkness for all of humanity.
[Keywords: Warhammer + Primarch OC + Original Legion + Lord of the Mysteries + Potion Pathways / Sequences]