Good book, but it gets boring and how should I said it? Too many unnecessary things towards the latter part.
There's too many woman and it took so much to tell their interactions which gets too many now.
His character is a bit too cowardly even at the latter part, damn it he got the strength now why so fukin wussy.
It was really good for me.
For those who said that it turns bad because the MC changes, He did but not to the point it became bad.
Anyway most of their dissatisfaction were already addressed in the novel, there's a reason for all those change and it was quite a good reason.
Good fanfic, If he was to created his original jutsu then it would be better.
As for the Topan guy above, Honestly you need to go get yourself educated. Author already explained why reviving himself was that complicated.
Author said he/she is a new author and since it is a fan fiction there's no need to comment too much on the book, but precisely because you're new and this is just a fan fiction you need to know what you need to correct.
1. Too rushed. Since this is a fan fiction, there's actually no need for you to think about many variable in writing, you only need to do a good pacing and yet you didn't do a good job on it.
2. Few Detail. There's no in depth explanation on too many things, not just MC. This is such a waste, you can actually do some in depth detail on some things to practice your writing.
3. Plot. Some plot you changed is not attractive, like I said in the first point, since you have no need to think about world creation you should be able to adjust the rest to the best state possible.
4. The system. Honestly , there's a little bit too many system novel this days. If you want to do a system thing then precision, detail, and concept is important. Doing it half assed is redundant.
5. New World Addition. This is actually the biggest trap for all kind of fanfic, even if there's connection between the two world I suggest not to do this.
Especially if you can't do it properly, it would only create a big hole for the novel. There's too many things mixed up in this novel, unnecessary.
Someone who read this review, please copy paste it to wherever this novel was originally posted.