Hmm so far I'd say author doesn't know how to write i mean look first of all you we all know chris is better than Miyuki and yet he's getting led by nose disrupting MCs rhythm completely by wrong calling and then he goes to mound saying you are messing up by being nervous like lmao that's in no showing anything worthy of chris here ...also I get it you wanna take the route of slow growth and what not but no need to make mc struggle like furuya or Sawamura he's ultimately different than them who had no prior experience whatsoever..here he's somehow at same level as mei in middle school lol reaching finals for 3 consecutive years and what not and now he's getting flustered at every damn little setback clearly that's inconsistent writing which was the reason og fell short and same here and what's with his breaking balls they're shit man as an og character in an already established series if you can't bring something good for mc it's pathetic and last I'm sorry his straight balls might not reach 150 but they're already above 140 consistently even reaching 145 with that speed Sawamura and sanda were already running riots and he who's somehow a very experienced player from middle school is full of freaking holes

Funny story and system...also when they introduced a character tang si with xiao wu rabbit beast as lover i was so done lmao .. Also just a guess but the system kinda feels like just giving all the things he was able to achieve in his last life back to him much quicker.. Loved the fact that there are other systems too though i have a sneaking suspicion that they're like subsystems of mcs main system bringing him harem members lol

As someone who's followed *Douluo Dalu* from the original to DD4, this fanfic feels like a complete betrayal of the core story and characters. It twists canon beyond recognition — turning Gu Yuena and the soul beasts into some oppressed, righteous force rising against the “evil” Divine Realm. This is **factually wrong**. The restriction on soul beasts becoming gods was created by the **Dragon God himself**, not human gods. The Divine Realm existed to **protect** the mortal plane, not control it. Characters like **Di Tian are completely miswritten**. In canon, he was ruthless, supremacist, and tried to enslave and kill the main characters multiple times. Here, he suddenly bows to an “elf emperor” bloodline— completely ignoring his original ideology and arc. He only began to change in DD4 after humans surpassed soul beasts through **hard work and technology**, not favoritism. The fanfic also adds nonsense like “angel race,” “elf race,” and “dragon race” — which were **never** part of Douluo lore. Qian Renxue was the Angel God’s inheritor, not some angelic race member. These additions feel like forced Western fantasy tropes dumped into a world that never needed them. Worse, the author promises fairness and a light-hearted tone — only to make the Divine Realm the villain, rewrite history, and pretend soul beasts were always victims. It’s manipulative, lazy writing that sacrifices all consistency for cheap sympathy. Honestly, it’s hard to understand the obsession the author (and many readers) have with Gu Yuena to justify rewriting canon this drastically. She’s been elevated into a symbol of rebellion at the cost of narrative coherence. Final Verdict: If you respect Douluo Dalu’s original world-building, skip this. It's a complete misrepresentation of the story, characters, and themes.

Totally lost interest the moment he summoned that so-called god-tier girl from another world. First off, I can't stand it when authors force another power system into an established one—just stick to Douluo's framework. If you really want some overpowered character, create a new god-king level being *within* the system. Second, what’s the point of a summon that isn’t loyal or controllable? She acts all high and mighty, has her own will, and apparently is some clone from another world? Nah. And the MC being submissive to her just makes it worse. If she’s truly omniscient and omnipotent, then why even bother continuing the story? Completely kills the tension and progression.

This novel was a mess—completely missed the point of Blue Lock. First, the MC doesn’t suit Ego’s vision at all—he’s just plain arrogant, with none of the depth or drive that makes a true egoist striker. If Ego only wanted to refine a single talent, he wouldn’t have created an entire system like Blue Lock. He was building a striker from scratch, not polishing someone already talented. Saying he only cares about Shinchi now is absurd and goes against everything the project stands for. Add to that the excessive dialogue and unnecessary nonsense—it’s just not it.

The story is increasingly frustrating and filled with contradictions. The protagonist is supposedly a former pro or top-level baseball player in his past life, with the ambition to reach the top again. He even claims he’s “never afraid of challenges,” yet his actions constantly contradict that. Instead of embracing competitive opportunities, he repeatedly runs away—from competing in Tokyo to not identifying as a pitcher, to avoiding head-to-head comparisons with rivals like Furuya or Sawamura. Despite wanting to go pro, he bizarrely chooses a mediocre team that gets knocked out early in Koshien over elite schools like Seido, which has a proven track record of producing professionals—even without recent Koshien wins. His logic doesn’t add up. If he’s truly serious about making it big, why choose a team that likely lacks resources, exposure, or a winning culture? On top of that, the emotional angle feels overplayed. The MC constantly leans into his “unwanted child” backstory, wallowing in self-pity and dragging the narrative down with his identity crisis. Instead of showing genuine development or grit, he hides behind his trauma like a crutch, becoming more of an emotional merchant than a driven athlete. His supposed past as a pro only makes this worse—it feels like the author is trying to sell a tortured genius, but ends up delivering a passive, indecisive character who lacks both conviction and consistency. At this point, the story feels like it's stalling. The endless chapters of Miyuki trying to recruit him are tiring, and the lack of meaningful growth in 50+ chapters makes it hard to stay invested. It seems like the author doesn’t know how to realistically push the MC forward, especially when it comes to surpassing the already-established core cast.

Pathetic and dumb ... like I knew it's gonna be bad just by title lol but never realised this bad like what the hell is up with that task and how tf did he went about it. .just went there like a creep and started nourishing the so called bones while she's sleeping lmao...even in original it happened in way when they become friends and all it was like a relationship thing xD not this perv shit

Frustrated by the main character's inconsistent behavior. Despite being older, more experienced, and physically gifted (with traits like dynamic vision and developed muscles), he still panics and makes the same reckless mistakes under pressure. The "realistic growth" theme feels forced, especially when he regresses emotionally every time a new challenge appears—contradicting his supposed maturity. It’s frustrating how the story repeats the same issues as the original series. The semi-final loss feels contrived—clearly written just to mirror Narumiya’s arc, rather than serving the characters' actual development. The coach’s choice to use Kawakami over Sawamura, who hadn’t been used the entire tournament, made no sense unless the goal was to force a loss. The same kind of narrative manipulation happened in the Ichidai Third game during the autumn tournament. Claiming it was due to a “butterfly effect” is weak—Amahisa had been out of baseball for over a year and realistically wouldn't have the stamina or sharpness needed at that point. Also, clarification: in the original fall tournament, aren’t there two spots for Koshien? If not, how did both Yakushi and Seido qualify at the same time? Lastly not saying that It's bad completely but i really don't like the inconsistent up and down like in one chapter he's already understood something and then he completely starts acting out forgetting the things he learned ..so forgive me for harsh reviews but this kind of stuff reminds me how og was completely ruined. And last that guy called Tatsuka hiromi or whatever he couldn't even become a starter for the summer and you are comparing him to tetsu ? Are you kidding me i guess author has obsession with handsome guys that guy only looked cooler while thrashing first years he couldn't do anything against real teams

I have never read anything more braindead and outrageous than this ...like first of all how tf old bee deduced so much about what he knows and what not they don't have enough time to just keep looking at a young wizard expressions and even if he knows in a magical world with talent like prophecy and all it can be easily taken care of not to mention the way Snape is going about it even if he's not a dark lord he'd force him to be one and Dumbledore should know that better than anyone having taught one such person himself yet he allows him to do that? And last when did minerva become so dumb that she'd allow snape and even help him to literally freaking interrogate a first year like that in front of so many people it's completely braindead novel and last part he doesn't need to freaking go through all this bs since they don't want him there just tell them that he wants to transfer to other school like that one in France it's much better than Hogwarts anyways both in atmosphere and studies atm

I'd say it was going good but his battle and the way he dealt with kingaku and ginkaku completely annoyed the hell out of me , it's like author is trying to keep him week on purpose. Why you ask? He was at ss- rating and his age at that time was around freaking 21 after 10-15 years even if he didn't do anything but just keep his age at prime rating should remain same .i won't talk about how he always seem to end up creating troubles when he can just follow normal plot but how the hell by fighting and using seven gates his body becomes 67 yr old? And even his rating is reduced and the stupid explanation is 'oh it's really a forbidden technique ' like seriously? It's completely stupid and shows author is just trying to nerf him around so that he can become useless whenever he's needed and can't change Naruto main plot .